More! OMG, more, please! I really liked Derek in the first story and now I must know his history. And Alyssa is so cool for someone who dislikes being around people. I'm similar, so I really like her. Large ginger cats - regardless of evilness - are always appreciated.
Glad you enjoyed! I appreciate the read especially as this was a long one.
Also glad you like Alyssa, I was worried her personality wasn't coming across enough because she's not a big out there character so pleased you find her cool. I do love a large ginger cat, he did escape so maybe he'll appear again.
Great story Deaks, a good combination of melancholy, humour and horror. Some excellent plot hooks for future stories with the escaping cat and the book of magic.
The demon on the bus was a tad odd as he did reluctantly give it back, perhaps a different demon, a sensitive human or a thrall or maybe a line that the book has to be willingly surrendered?
I wonder where Dave's life will lead him now? He has seen the risks and rewards of magic now. Will be fervently anti-magic? Will he try to destroy the book and everything his brother achieved? Or has he had that taste of sugar and desperately seeks more?
I have stayed at the Brighton Grand a few times and adore it. I wonder if Derek has a hidden cache of books or supplies in Brighton? He has an excellent taste in hotels. The broken, burnt husk of a pier reminds me a bit of Dave, someone who has always been the golden boy, but then breaks down when he finds his brother has over achieved him.
Cracking tale Deaks!
(Apologies for the spelling / grammar, I'm typing on my phone as I head to Soho.)
Hmmm. I liked Derek as the 'ghost in the machine'. I don't know how I feel about this follow-up, although it definitely goes with the mysterious book. Perhaps I just need more explanation of the demon and of Dave's motives. Also, did Derek die (again) in the house fire? Or did he go somewhere else? I really thought Dave was going to be Derek, since Derek was a magician. That would have been cool.
That's fair. I was trying to say that the voicemail was a trick and not from Derek at all but appreciate that maybe wasn't super clear. This was a tricky one to write so maybe I'll have some different ideas later or explore something else.
I definitely understood the voicemail was fake! I think it's just a weird story. LOL. I enjoyed it! Especially since I was one of the three who asked (begged) for more.
More! OMG, more, please! I really liked Derek in the first story and now I must know his history. And Alyssa is so cool for someone who dislikes being around people. I'm similar, so I really like her. Large ginger cats - regardless of evilness - are always appreciated.
Glad you enjoyed! I appreciate the read especially as this was a long one.
Also glad you like Alyssa, I was worried her personality wasn't coming across enough because she's not a big out there character so pleased you find her cool. I do love a large ginger cat, he did escape so maybe he'll appear again.
Great story Deaks, a good combination of melancholy, humour and horror. Some excellent plot hooks for future stories with the escaping cat and the book of magic.
The demon on the bus was a tad odd as he did reluctantly give it back, perhaps a different demon, a sensitive human or a thrall or maybe a line that the book has to be willingly surrendered?
I wonder where Dave's life will lead him now? He has seen the risks and rewards of magic now. Will be fervently anti-magic? Will he try to destroy the book and everything his brother achieved? Or has he had that taste of sugar and desperately seeks more?
I have stayed at the Brighton Grand a few times and adore it. I wonder if Derek has a hidden cache of books or supplies in Brighton? He has an excellent taste in hotels. The broken, burnt husk of a pier reminds me a bit of Dave, someone who has always been the golden boy, but then breaks down when he finds his brother has over achieved him.
Cracking tale Deaks!
(Apologies for the spelling / grammar, I'm typing on my phone as I head to Soho.)
Currently I feel like Dave has learnt his lesson... but you never know with these arrogant city types. 😉🤣
Yes I might need to take him out if I redraft, maybe she sees him watching her from the window or something? Something sinister anyhow.
Thanks for commenting!
He would always be on the bus watching her.
It just seems odd when he gets the book, but then gives it back.
Hmmm. I liked Derek as the 'ghost in the machine'. I don't know how I feel about this follow-up, although it definitely goes with the mysterious book. Perhaps I just need more explanation of the demon and of Dave's motives. Also, did Derek die (again) in the house fire? Or did he go somewhere else? I really thought Dave was going to be Derek, since Derek was a magician. That would have been cool.
That's fair. I was trying to say that the voicemail was a trick and not from Derek at all but appreciate that maybe wasn't super clear. This was a tricky one to write so maybe I'll have some different ideas later or explore something else.
I definitely understood the voicemail was fake! I think it's just a weird story. LOL. I enjoyed it! Especially since I was one of the three who asked (begged) for more.
It is pretty darn weird but then I do like a bit of weirdness aha. Thanks for your feedback I appreciate it. 😊